Thank You Letter For My Parents

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Thank You Letter For My Parents

Postby Dov » Fri Oct 21, 2011 9:48 am

Hello,

Can you correct my letter, please ?

Dear Mom & Dad,

Thank you for everything you have done for me my entire life.

You have given me so much, and I in return, so little. Life, love, food, shelter, clothes, toys, education; I could literally go on forever.

There is no way for me to express my utmost gratitude and thanks to you two. Through the good times and the bad, you have always been there for me guiding me on the right path.

The thing, though, that I am most grateful for is your love. Without your love my life would be meaningless. Sometimes when I’m feeling down the only thing that is able to put a smile on my face is the knowledge that I have two wonderful parents who love and care about me. You two are the best role-models and parents I could have ever asked for.

Thank you for giving me this life. Thank you for giving me your love. Thank you for everything.


thanks a lot
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Re: Thank You Letter For My Parents

Postby Gabrielle » Sat Oct 22, 2011 8:26 am

Dear Mom & Dad,

Thank you for everything you have done for me my entire life.

You have given me so much, and I in return, so little. Life, love, food, shelter, clothes, toys, education; I could literally go on forever.

There is no way for me to express my utmost gratitude and thanks to you two. Through the good times and the bad, you have always been there for me guiding me on the right path.

The thing, though, that I am most grateful for is your love. Without your love my life would be meaningless. Sometimes when I’m feeling down the only thing that is able to put a smile on my face is the knowledge that I have two wonderful parents who love and care about me. You two are the best role-models and parents I could have ever asked for.

Thank you for giving me this life. Thank you for giving me your love. Thank you for everything.


Overall, nice flow and it reads well, just a couple of small mistakes of word placement such as the sentence:'There is no way for me to express my utmost gratitude and thanks to you two" = sounds better as: There are no words or actions big enough for me to be able to express my utmost gratitude and thanks to you both"

The sentence: "The thing, though, that I am most grateful for is your love" might be better as: "The thing that I am most grateful for though, is your love"
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