Request for internship in Managment Department

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Request for internship in Managment Department

Postby lilipuce » Mon Feb 20, 2012 10:17 am

February 15th ,2012.

Dear Sir or Madam ,
Re: Internship

The international reputation of your firm as well as its very good performances bring me to apply for a training period within your society in the Management Department.

I'm currently a second year student in a double Bachelor's degree in economics, management and foreign languages . I wish to follow my studies in the field of international trade and in management.
As your firm is resolutely focused on international expansion ,my linguistic competences could be efficiently bet in benefit.
Besides, my capacities in economics and management will allow me to constitute a reinforcement for your team at a time when only the luxury sector does not know the crisis.
Very reactive, I have quickly developped my adaptability as well as my intuition during my various trips abroad.
Volunteer and dynamics ,I shall perform in a most efficient possible manner the missions which you will entrust me.

I look forward to an interview with you in the near future and will plan to contact you in a few days.
Regards,
Xxxxxx XXXXXXX.

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Re: Request for internship in Managment Department

Postby Gabrielle » Mon Feb 20, 2012 3:05 pm

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Dear Sir or Madam ,
Re: Internship

The international reputation of your firm as well as its very good performances bring me to apply for a training period within your [color=#BF40FF][b][i][u]society[/u][/i][/b][/color] in the Management Department.

I'm currently a second year student in a double Bachelor's degree in economics, management and foreign languages . I wish to follow my studies in the field of international trade and in management.
As your firm is resolutely focused on international expansion ,[color=#BF40FF][b][i][u]my linguistic competences could be efficiently bet in benefit.[/u][/i][/b][/color]
[color=#BF40FF][b][i][u]Besides, my capacities in economics and management will allow me to constitute a reinforcement for your team at a time when only the luxury sector does not know the crisis.[/u][/i][/b][/color]
[color=#BF40FF]Very reactive, I have quickly developped my adaptability as well as my intuition during my various trips abroad.[/color]
[color=#BF40FF][b][i][u]Volunteer and dynamics ,I shall perform in a most efficient possible manner the missions which you will entrust me[/u][/i][/b].[/color]

I look forward to an interview with you in the near future and will plan to contact you in a few days.
Regards,
Xxxxxx XXXXXXX.

Enclosure: Resume


Hello and thank you for using our free service.
Your overall letter is ok, layout and structure of what you are trying to get across, however, I am not sure of your mother tongue but my guess is that this letter was written in French and run through a Google Translate?

I would suggest you try to refine it yourself, especially if your studies are in foreign languages as you mention. This is one of your key talents so you need to show this in your written presentation of yourself, which is this C.V.
There are several areas (which I have highlighted in colour for you) that unfortunately do not make sense in English as the sentence is not clear and uses words not usually associated with your subject matter. You also begin a sentence with the word "Besides" - in English you cannot begin a sentence with "Besides" as it refers to an already mentioned subject matter.

If you would like us to professionally translate your letter for you, this is a service that we do provide and are happy to help you further with this.
Thank you.
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